IELTS General Training Writing Task 2 Topic:
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Some people say that friends are more important than family in today’s world; others say that family is always more important.
Write in support of one of these views.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from youi own
knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
PLAN YOUR ANSWER
Step 1: Analyse the task:
Read carefully to understand all the details such as what type of essay it is (agree or disagree), what key words are (friend/family/today’s world/more important argument/support/one/views)
Step 2: Generate ideas:
Ask questions (mostly based on key words):
What are some effects of geographical mobility?
==> causing friends to replace families to some degree?
salaries/conditions in richer countries not expanding rapidly. Why?
Isn’t family vita at key life stages?
==>birth, marriage, death and care of elderly relatives
What about family and identity?
==>family tells you who you are/where you are from
But aren’t friends even more vital?
==>are important, can be chosen; better than some families which have problems or breakdown
Step 3: Structure the ideas
Introduction: say what view you are going to argue for, and why
Paragraph 2: effects on family of moving
Paragraph 3: family takes major responsibility during key life stages
Paragraph 4: family and family history give you your identity.
Conclusion: some families break up; we can choose friends, but in the end family more likely to take responsibility for its members.
Correct these paragraphs. The number of errors to find is indicated below. Check your corrections with the sample answer at the end of this post.
There are crucial time in life when families seem replaceable. These including the main life changes such as marriage, birth and deaths. With life expectancy increasing, caring for elderly relatives is also becoming a vital role for family members. Although friends can be rely upon to offer support and loyalty, they may no always be willing to sacrifice their lives for long-terms care of an elderly or sick person who is not relative.
Family ties create a long, unbroken history stretching far into past and this means that member of a family feel a share sense of identity and genetic correction. In Australia, for example, it seems that a popular pastimes involves the tracing of family trees back to original countries from which migrating families come.
Friend are obviously vital to everyones wellbeing and it is truth that we choose our friends but cannot choose our family. Sad, there are numerous story of families who deliberately lose contact with another because of disputes or dart secrets. Nevertheless, it is the family, ultimatum, which accept and carries responsibility to its members.
Can you find and correct a total of 26 errors?
Your score? 16 (Good) 12 (OK) 10 (Try harder) 8 (Time’s running out!)
Band 8.0 Sample Answer:
This essay will argue that families are more important than friends, principally because of the strong sense of responsibility that family members feel for one another. Blood ties represent the most powerful shapers of long-term relationships in most cases.
It is certainly true that in many modern societies, people move more often because of work, economic migration and even wars. Clearly this means that many families are split up geographically and that strong friendships replace the extended family, at least for those people who have moved far from their parents’ original area.
There are crucial times in life when families seem irreplaceable. These include the main life changes such as marriage, birth and death. With life expectancy increasing, caring for elderly relatives is also becoming a vital role for family members. Although friends can be relied upon to offer support and loyalty, they may not always be willing to sacrifice their lives for long-term care of an elderly or sick person who is not a relative.
Family ties create a long, unbroken history stretching far into the past and this means that members of a family feel a shared sense of identity and genetic connection. In Australia, for example, it seems that a popular pastime involves the tracing of family trees back to the original countries from which migrating families came.
Friends are obviously vital to everyone’s well-being and it is true that we choose our friends but cannot choose our family. Sadly, there are numerous stories of families who deliberately lose contact with one another because of disputes or dark secrets. Nevertheless, it is the family, ultimately, which accepts and carries the responsibility for its members.
- The introduction gives a clear indication of the writer’s position and the essay’s direction.
- There is no separate concluding paragraph; the writer uses the final paragraph to give the other
view and uses the final sentence as a sort of conclusion. This saves time if under pressure.
- There is a good range of complex sentences and these aid the flow of ideas being put forward.
- The vocabulary is varied and appropriate and this contributes to a strong answer.