IELTS General Training Writing Task 2 Topic:
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
It seems that many companies today are becoming much more concerned with profit than with the happiness of their workers.
How could companies take better care of their workers in the future?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
PLAN YOUR ANSWER
Band 8.0 Sample Answer:
It seems to be the case that in many countries companies are concentrating on profits and are neglecting the welfare of their staff. A range of examples will be presented to support this position and some possible improvements offered.
Globalised world trade is controlled by simple economic realities – making the biggest profits at the smallest expense. How is this being achieved? During the last twenty years many manufacturing companies in the USA and Europe have moved their factories to economies like China, Mexico or Thailand which have lower labour costs. Service industries in wealthier countries have been able to use low interest rates, weaker trade unions and rising unemployment rates to keep wages and conditions from improving rapidly.
In education there are other examples of business-style practices, and worsening conditions for staff. Many universities employ more academic staff on short contracts, releasing themselves from making expensive pension provisions or offering other long-term benefits. Lecturers are forced to re-apply for their own jobs every few years. A sense of loyalty is not promoted by such processes.
To change the situation requires a major shift in attitudes. It is difficult to see how this might be achieved, as governments embrace more and more the laissez-faire approach of global economics. The only possible source of change must come from companies themselves. They need to see their employees as members of a family not as costly units of labour. They should collaborate with workers groups to build good levels of pension protection and health care. A worker who trusts that his employer is trying to protect his interests is a better worker. Companies still need loyalty and continuity.
Without major changes in management philosophy the future looks like becoming tougher and more stressful for many workers, especially those from the next generation, whose hopes need to be nurtured, not dashed.
• The introductory paragraph manages to paraphrase many of the words used in the task prompt. This shows good command of vocabulary and creates a positive impression.
• The essay has many noun pairs to help to communicate complex information more efficiently.
• The essay has a good mixture of simple sentences and complex ones. The final paragraph, for example, consists of only one complex sentence.
• The variety of vocabulary suggests that the writer has some background knowledge of business/economics terminology.